The outcome from my intial draft was good. The comments I received back were positive, but I need to add more of the 'why', explaining or hypothesising as to why the two poli had such differing values and why each implented the values that they did for a maximum mark.
Over the last week I have been in the process of incorporating my own thoughts with supporting evidence into my essay to try and achieve what is desired. Focusing on why each polis was like that rather than the facts has assisted me in developing a bigger picture, and has allowed me to ponder why the two societies had such differing values.
I hope that I will be able to communicate this effectively into my final essay. I have planned another consulation with my teacher for Thursday of this week, to get some final feedback and perhaps suggest some cuts, as my word count is slightly over the limit, which will need to be addressed.
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